Thursday, April 05, 2007

 

A HUG TO REMEMBER ...

Amazing feelings, surprisingly deluging,

Eternally all over pleasant but don’t mean a thing!

With pleasure heart pounds but mind doesn’t ring!

Better than all the songs and yet I don’t sing.


Is it too common or am I just matured?

My heart has its needs but still I am cured!

Emotions I have bucketful; much left and some poured,

Feelings though associated; my mind still secured!


With eternal rhyming I do love affection,

Not only in mind but also in flesh and bone,

Sing it a lot making merry and having fun,

I haven’t changed; real me is not yet gone.


Then what has happened, what is the fuss?

I don’t think I have gained, but is this a loss?

I used to cry unable to take even an emotional toss,

And yet I am fine when arrows passed my heart across.


Of course this is real feeling as I can feel joy,

However bad I might land, this I can’t destroy.

Isn’t it sweet and pleasant when a girl hugs a boy?

Yet nothing happened except that a lot I did enjoy.


About her I know a lot; so much and yet so little,

Fast enough always to recompose, so flexible and yet so brittle,

Soft to me with eyes and ears; unless I start to whittle.

Unsure of future, I will await the day when get erased it will.


Emotions change but feelings remain the same,

Proof of my enjoyment today is this very poem.

This verse might say I am ignorant, idiot and lame,

But I am just a player and life is a game.


Met her in hurry yet slowly, appraised her as a Venus beauty,

Unaware of sequels I valued; praising beauties is my duty.

Said the truth and the sweet, I don’t question my fidelity,

My excuse, even if you question is simply God’s cruelty.


Flirted now, flirted then, flirt and fun all it was,

Fun was all I ever thought; as sense of humor awesome she has,

I got and she got; neither of us ever did cadge,

Youth was all we had, Love was never our badge.


Roamed around at nights in dark when hazy were our lives,

Though how normal it might seem, serendipity it does thrives.

I once slept and she once too, but the awake always drives,

With all these spark and romance, emotion never survives.


Lust added to fun and fines, grew for a day or two,

Nothing more I felt and I liked her and I did woo.

Little feelings are there, it is correct and it is true,

Friendship was there, although undefined; and it grew.


Never did I miss her and never did I recall;

But for once upon a time when I got her final call.

Her duty is over and she will leave for once and all,

I felt bad though there was no court and no ball.


Wondered and wondered; yes I did ponder,

Why I am feeling and where did I do the blunder?

There was never any cloud but why there is thunder?

There was no love and emotions but I did sunder.


For the final time I went to see her to say good bye,

Remembered everything even the first “Hi”,

Half of her face covered by hair I saw only her one eye,

That moment, too beautiful, was eternal and I did die.


There was nothing common yet everything we shared;

Love, Lust, Affection, Passion and Sympathy all stared,

To strip her and her heart, my eyes blushingly dared,

Did I fall for the girl once I never cared?


I wished her Bon Voyage holding her hand,

Turned back and started to walk and I didn’t understand,

Far away I walked, ran, and jumped but I couldn’t stand

The pain of parting, it was neither good nor grand.


But I didn’t want to lose and I had to find out,

At least am I the only one or she also had to scout?

It is my life and I didn’t want any doubt,

I would ask, yell, tell and even I would shout.


There was no hope but even then the insatiable spirit soared,

Loud, violent, rash and fast through the roads it roared,

I had to reach there before she had to board,

I just had to speak to her and she would be floored.


Confused and sad she looked, for the train as she was waiting for,

Excited in silence she got to see me being there for her,

A blush and a smile she incurred and I got my answer,

I hugged her and she gave me A Hug To Remember …


Comments:
well ashona wat shud i say....all ur poems are enthrallin' ....but this one simply left me numbed for feeling..probably the fact tht I know the context in which it is written makes me more appreciative of it....sm ppl acquire the art of rhyming words and putting 'em down eloquently..but u r a natural at heart...just don't keep on writing such masterpieces [:)] ...'coz they compel my ever-lazy fingers to write something appreciative and words can only describe each of ur poem so much!!!! (altho' the fact is that words are all u use too) :D
 
Your poem truly reflects how honest ur emotions are.. this is the best of you I have read... its simply very good :).
 
i m dumb struck.
jst 2 wrds- simply amazing.
 
u have created new scales of excellence... :)
Nice one...
This poetry reminds me of ur story abt the train journey...

It makes me feel like thinking abt a tailor sewing simple threads n making a well-furnished suit...

An event described brilliantly sewing each moments, each emotions, each words(some uttered some silence).

A note from a friend:

The poem gives me insight to the event and the characters concerned...but kalu...u know...moments..it allures..n u r also attracted by the fragrance of the soothing moment...it may seem like u r falling for the moment..but dont fall..as u say..moments die with time..


a lengthy comment for a lengthy poem.. :D
 
but did she get her answer?

mind blowing "poem" yaar ... however "hypocrites" ( :D ) poets might be this kind of brilliance should be praised...

hats off !!!
 
@anonymous
i don't know if she had any answer. i don't know whether she is a hypocrite or not. i don't know whether she had any questions or not. i just know she smiled and that was my answer. if she wouldn't have smiled then also i would have got my answer. but the poem would have mentioned bitterness if it would have been mentioned at all. i am just sharing happiness. she told me once to share happiness. and i am not sure whether my happiness lied on her smile or the answer or y feelings. anyways, i am just happy and i am happy to have shared it. :)

thanx btw :)
 
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